Welcome
to the All That Jazz. Sarah Vaughan said
“There are notes between the notes.” In this workshop we will look to jazz
vocalists as inspiration. We will listen to various jazz vocalists and discuss
their varied distinctions – sound, silence and rhythm. Then we will
turn to our poems and consider how some of the techniques of jazz vocalists can
aid us in revising old poems and/or creating new poems.
All That Jazz: In KY Workshop
Thursday, April 21, 2016
Wednesday, April 20, 2016
POETRY GUIDELINES FOR WORKSHOP FEEDBACK
POETRY GUIDELINES FOR WORKSHOP
FEEDBACK:
Comments that are less than
insightful and courteous are not acceptable during workshops, so use the art of
being tactful when addressing areas that may need strengthening in a peers’
work. Our workshops should be a positive learning experience, so everyone feels
safe in sharing their work. Therefore, do not just flatter and praise peers
with empty words of “I loved your poem” but actually identify the WHY and
specific examples of what worked well. It helps no one to understand their
strengths or weaknesses if you do not answer WHY it doesn’t work or WHY/HOW it
does work well. Moreover, if you want to receive feedback on your work, you
must also provide feedback on your peers’ work by using some of the points
below as a guide to help you discuss a poem.
Note, during the workshop session
of your work, you should be listening carefully and taking notes on the
feedback others provide on your work. Remember you should not interrupt others
when they are giving feedback and do not become defensive, but listen, take
notes, and at the end of the feedback, ask members questions if you require
clarification on something that they identified. Again, anyone who is less than
courteous in giving or receiving feedback will be asked to leave and come back
when they have more constructive and helpful feedback to offer. A good rule of
thumb is the “sandwich approach” by layering your feedback in the following
way: identify a specific strength in the work, follow with an area that needs
improvement, and end your feedback by offering another key strength in the
work.
1.
What’s working well in the poem and why?*
2.
Does the student leave the reader with any
unanswered questions? If so, what are your questions that would help clarify
your understanding of the poem?
3.
Does the reader understand the meaning of the
poem and can identify a central idea or theme? If so, summarize the meaning of
the poem, or are the student’s references too vague and contrived that it is
too abstract to identify the meaning.
4.
Does the student use specific, concrete details
and imagery to “show” rather than simply “tell” the reader? Is the language
vivid, not flowery, archaic, or cliché? Does it sound original, use colorful
images, and elicit an emotional response?
5.
Do they use a consistent and appropriate point
of view? If not, what helpful suggestions can you make?
6.
What sort of tone do they use in the poem? Is
the tone appropriate? If not, would a more sarcastic, didactic, or melancholy
tone work?
7.
Does the student use forced rhyme or does the
rhyme enhance the poem? If so, what lines need work and why? What appropriate
suggestions can you make?
8.
Does the student use figurative language, such
as personification, simile, metaphor, or hyperbole, and does it enhance the
meaning of the poem or is it used inappropriately? If not, what suggestions can
you make?
9.
Does the student use an appropriate structure
with stanzas and/or an appropriate meter for each line to create harmony and
consistent beat/rhythm or simply smoother transitions and continuity between
lines or does it create more confusion because the lines are too lengthy or wordy
and maybe the line breaks make it difficult to understand?
10.
Does the student have major mechanical and/or
minor mechanical errors? Which grammar and punctuation issues need to be
corrected, such as spelling, missing punctuation (i.e. apostrophes, commas,
etc.) for minor mechanical errors? Then, consider some major mechanical errors
that they need to address; in other words, do they have subject-verb agreement
errors, inconsistencies in verb tense (jumping back and forth between past and
present), etc.?
Free Write
I Can't Give You Anything but Love - Ella Fitzgerald
Ella
Fitzgerald is an ardent listener and what I call a "copycat" jazz singer. From her we learn the art and strengths
of impersonations.
Songster Tradition
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from https://www.tumblr.com/search/awesome%20songwriting%20tips |
A "songster"
is a wandering musician, usually but not always African-American, of the type
which first appeared in the late 19th century in the southern
United States. Tyehimba
Jess has a book a poetry inspired by the songster Huddle
William Ledbetter, leadbelly.
The songster
tradition began soon after the end of slavery and the Reconstruction era in the United
States, when African-American musicians became able to travel and
play music for a living. As the guitar became more widely
popular, the songsters often accompanied themselves, rather than relying on a
band or ensemble.
In the jazz
tradition, many vocalists sing “standard” songs and use their voices to make
the song unique. An example is the various interpretations of
“My Favorite Things”. I posted some videos below for you to compare and
analyze.
Songsters often sang composed songs or traditional ballads, frequently about legendary heroes or characters. Poet and playwright Sonia Sanchez extends the songster tradition in her poems by honoring the work of figures such as Ella Fitzgerald and Tupac Shakur.
My Favorite Things: Various
Another Ella - George Ella Lyon - Poet Laureate of Kentucky
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from http://www.kentucky.com/entertainment/books/article44561367.html |
Kentucky's 2015-2016
poet laureate, George Ella wrote "Where I'm From".
Where
I'm From
I am from
clothespins,
from Clorox
and carbon-tetrachloride.
I am from the
dirt under the back porch.
(Black,
glistening,
it tasted like
beets.)
I am from the
forsythia bush
the Dutch elm
whose
long-gone limbs I remember
as if they
were my own.
I'm from fudge
and eyeglasses,
from
Imogene and Alafair.
I'm from the
know-it-alls
and
the pass-it-ons,
from Perk up!
and Pipe down!
I'm from He
restoreth my soul
with
a cottonball lamb
and
ten verses I can say myself.
I'm from
Artemus and Billie's Branch,
fried corn and
strong coffee.
From the
finger my grandfather lost
to
the auger,
the eye my
father shut to keep his sight.
Under my bed
was a dress box
spilling old
pictures,
a sift of lost
faces
to drift
beneath my dreams.
I am from
those moments--
snapped before
I budded --
leaf-fall from
the family tree.
Be a copycat or an impressionist like Ella Fitzgerald. Revise your initial writing to mimic George Ella Lyon's "Where I'm From". You may choose to use a four stanza structure and create similar metaphors.
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